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Spark's Policeman Joined: 28 Jul 2006 Posts: 26 Location: Reeders, Pennsylvania	Posted: Tue Aug 01, 2006 7:52 pm    Post subject: Part 2   ok, here's part 2. i really hope you guys like it. send me your thoughts here.
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mrguy08 Class 100 Hero Joined: 26 Apr 2006 Posts: 223 Location: South Mississippi	Posted: Wed Aug 02, 2006 1:43 pm    Post subject:   I'm glad to see this interesting tale told in first person narrative and script dialogue is getting a continuation. If there's anymore uncles you'll have quite a collection going. I like the character because it adds personality to the narrative and I personally wouldn't mind if you went off on a tangent a little more. Explaining why the character has a fear of needles makes it much more believable then just saying it. I still have some questions about the believability of Kenny's abilities though. You say he picked up that metal table and killed the Rikti by bashing his head in. I know that there is more to the character than meets the eye but you really painted the picture of bullied shrimp in the first chapter. _________________ Example of irony: Hippopotomonstrosesquippedaliophobia= fear of long words.
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Spark's Policeman Joined: 28 Jul 2006 Posts: 26 Location: Reeders, Pennsylvania	Posted: Wed Aug 02, 2006 10:03 pm    Post subject: Answers   I think i painted the wrong image for Kenny. It's not that he's a shrimp, it's the fact that he's an outcast and is easily beaten due to his natural fears that we all suffer. Cross-Bones was simply stronger than Kenny, by two years and 100 pounds. Kenny was working out of Adredline when he whacked Sobek on the head with that table(by the by, he didn't kill Sobek. just KO'ed him). Kenny has an expansive family, including several members that live in Ireland and are members of the IRA, so expect to see several more member apearing in this hopefully ongoing series.
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