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Riotmech
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PostPosted: Wed Nov 08, 2006 12:12 pm    Post subject: Chapter 2 pt1 Reply with quote
 
ok...i finally finished the first part of chapter 2....and i know it still sucks...but you gotta say! It is better then the last one no? Confused
I did as you asked give a bit more insight into Kai's life....personally his family...and also his starting training as the hero Aven....i dunno if you guys read it...and if you didn't, please do. Even if it's just to bring me down a notch or 2 Smile


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Riotmech
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 11, 2006 10:24 am    Post subject: Reply with quote
 
. . .hum. . .guess no one's gonna read the story huh? Confused
aaw well it was fun while it lasted. . . Confused


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Tropic
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Joined: 25 Apr 2006
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 11, 2006 12:13 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
 
Hey man! Don't get discouraged!

Just because no one has posted anything yet dosen't mean they haven't read it! And there are plenty of people who go to the site and read everything and never comment here so....

But I do have a confession to make...with all the stories, the posting, the art and real life I very rarely get a chance to read the very stuff I post! Shameful, I know but its a fact of life!

So, just know that someone out there is reading and sooner or later someone will take up the challenge and post their POV here.

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Voyager
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Joined: 28 Apr 2006
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 02, 2006 3:59 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
 
I went ahead, read it, but since you were looking for comments, I'll provide it, which I usually don't. Don't ask me why, hard to explain.


Your introduction to chapter 2 was well started, but I mst admit that your comparison always resorted to either day or night, no shades of grey in them. That got to me. But it did show a sense of perspective in your writing worth exploring in the future.

Chapter 2 was also short, and after reading the first paragraph, I was hoping to read more out of it.

Keep it up, it's coming along well.

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