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fixit God-like Powers

Joined: 01 May 2006 Posts: 605 Location: Utah
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Posted: Thu Jan 04, 2007 8:01 pm Post subject: At odds |
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I have to admit i both admire you and pitty you for taking on this story. On the one hand, we've seen the F.P. take on Tyrant and the evil phalanx (or whatever they're called) in a recent comic. It seems a little done.
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I like your characters. The dynamic of your "super group" is fun. You have a man who's been around since at least WWII, who has actually seen Statesman bloodied. and the characters range in size and experience down to a diminutive junior high student. The scene where AA has to call his contact from a payphone is very telling, it lets us know that he's been around for a while.
If, somehow, this story leads to a media coup, resulting in the story being what was out out in the comic... well then, that would be an interesting twist.
It looks liket he spacing was casued by poor transfer. If there's anything can be done about it, the big, and frequent breaks do kind of break up the action.
Keep posting, I'll keep reading.
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