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Chapter 3

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xury_1_2 Bystander Joined: 03 Apr 2007 Posts: 12 Location: San Antonio	Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2007 4:21 am    Post subject: Chapter 3   This chapter reminds me of someone I met before online. On his very first day, there was the winter event going on. Back when they had the Winter Lords roaming the streets. He was like," Is THIS how the game is like?!" I had to explain to him that it was just one of the many events that they host. Overall I think he enjoyed it though. In Chapter 3 the Vigilantes register in Hero Corps and get a temporary humble abode. Kayain and the others fight crime without even knowing it. Cherry gets hassled by paperwork. Danyel plots ways of making Kayain loose his bet, which turns out to be very humorous. More to come soon. _________________ @xury
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Altec Policeman Joined: 30 Jan 2007 Posts: 30 Location: The U of K	Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2007 11:25 pm    Post subject:   Hello there Xury_1_2 I got to admit its great reading all the new writers works, seeing as im kinda new to the whole fan fiction scene myself. You have some great ideas in your stories, the interplay between your characters are great. The three hellions and death sequence had me chuckling for abit , but can I make one small suggestion if I may. This is a piece of advice I realised myself after posting my first story, Every rose has its thorn. My advice is split your stories up a bit more, yes the detail you go into is briliant I'm not disparaging that. Trying to process that amount of information in one sitting can be slightly off putting to the reader. This is not a criticism Just a little something i've realised working on my new series. Hope to see more from you soon. _________________ They didn't come in peace. They came in a Mothership. Their going to be leaving in a bodybag! Invasion : Issue 10 This time its Personal!
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xury_1_2 Bystander Joined: 03 Apr 2007 Posts: 12 Location: San Antonio	Posted: Fri Apr 13, 2007 6:32 am    Post subject:   At some point, I believe after the length of Chapter 7, I decided to indeed split them up more often. At this point it would be redundant (which is funny coming from a guy with super long chapters ) As I have alredy written up to chapter 10, and working on 11. One thing I don't think I mentioned was I am going for an acual novel-type, which means chapters can be long or short. I prefer longer chapters myself, just with scenes seperated at the lines. I know, there's a difference when someone writes and writes, then posts a short story chapter. A lot of people read it cause yeah it's short. So naturally it gets a bit more replies. Frankly that's not my style. I write to entertain those who really like to read. It sure would put off a few casual readers, but eh, I'm looking for those who enjoy reading as much as I do. I'm the kind of guy who sees a short story, skims through it, and maybe reads it later. If I see a quality long story, I will find some time to sit and read it, because I know that person put tons of effort into it. I appreciate that. But yea, I acually DID think of spliting chapters shorter, but that's a possibilty I won't worry about until I'm acually done with it. _________________ @xury
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