CoH Writer's Guild Review

[RoboZon]

it was very good i really liked the little details you put in like Lab.... i would never have thought of him in a million years but he is the perfict little add on
there was a few gramatical errors of course but name one story on the site that doesnt have em
one question is about the colors why is the story colored differently
i liked how this one really added suspence to an already suspenceful tale
in my opinion you can never add to much suspence espetionaly in writing

[Voyager]

Yeah, about the coloring, it was a marker when I was writing it, a poitn reference, didn't know I had forgotten to take it off...

Dammit, it had to be during a week where I'm the only poster... The rave reviews I will get from this.... *cries*

Lab is female, a returning cameo. She is one on my wife's toon, and I really enjoyed writing her in the first time around, more a sentient being than anything else, an animal dreaming that she is human, if you will.

Ah well...



Bring it!

[mrguy08]

You know as psychotically long (I think you hit the novel mark many chapters back) as this story is it still becomes more and more engaging with each chapter. I don't know if you ever want to think about writing proffesionally but if this is the only thing by you that I read it will be a failure to the literary community. Also, I have to wonder. Is Voyager really dead? It just seems impossible that he could be dragged into the sewers and shot and this ends such a powerful ex-hero. Your story is one of if not the best CoH fan fictions ever written and now that we seem to be nearing the inevitable conclusion its like counting down the days till the end of summer or some other suitable analogy.

I think you mentioned something about rave reviews?

[fixit]

HAHA your story is colorful like when a teenage girl writes a love note!

ok, so in all honesty, I havent even looked at it yet, but I saw the post above about the type of comments you were gonna get, and I couldn't wait to join in. I promise not to post more until I have read it and have something nice to say.

[Voyager]

I have to wonder. Is Voyager really dead? It just seems impossible that he could be dragged into the sewers and shot and this ends such a powerful ex-hero.

A simple, boring death, why not?

[Myths n' Wraiths]

Wepp needs to die . He is a very well written villain becuase I truely want him dead.

Anywho, this is a great chapter Voyager. As usual, i am duely impressed. Very dark and depressingly bleak but in the best sort of way (if thatmakes sense). Should set up for one hell of a come-back. I am teaming with anticipation .