Posted: Thu Dec 14, 2006 2:59 pm Post subject: Heart of Stone
Your introduction sounded veryt angsty, and if that was what you were looking to do, you did succeed in my mind.
The presentation of information in your first chapter was very well done. I was interested in what came next with each paragraph, and you did not clutter with too much information, or leave me with too little to understand the plot. I think you did a good job and I will be interested in the next Chapter
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Posted: Wed May 16, 2007 4:44 am Post subject:
Didn't get around to reviewing chapter one but I will jump in with chapter Two and say, very well done. The CoT are just as commanly used around here as they are hated but I like this twist you are throwing in. Cool stuff, and keep it coming.
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