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Ode to the Dogs of War SG on Justice Server

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Ockham Freedom Phalanx Founding Member Joined: 25 Apr 2006 Posts: 877 Location: I give a crap!	Posted: Thu Jan 03, 2008 12:53 pm    Post subject: Ode to the Dogs of War SG on Justice Server   From the perspective of the villains of Paragon City, the Rogue Isles, and beyond. via Def Leppard - Hysteria Album - Gods of War song Dogs of War Feelin' like it's all over, feelin' like there's no love Feelin' like it's not easy, breathin' life in the dust On a countdown to zero take a ride on the nightmare machine There ain't gonna be heroes There ain't gonna be anything Oh Here it comes, here comes the night Here it comes, hell in the night Here it comes, here comes the night When we all fall down When we walk into silence When we shadow the sun When we surrender to violence Oh Then the damage is done Put away that gun! I don't wanna be there I don't wanna be anywhere Oh! Here it comes, here comes the night Here it comes, hell in the night Here it comes, here comes the night That's right! We're fightin' for the Dogs of War but what the hell we fightin' for? We're fightin' with the Dogs of War but I'm a rebel And I ain't gonna fight no more no way! On a countdown to zero Take a ride on the nightmare machine There ain't gonna be heroes (Whoa) There ain't gonna be anything No! Here it comes, here comes the night Here it comes, hell in the night Here it comes, here comes the night Don't ya know that's right! We're fightin' for the Dogs of War but what the hell we fightin' for? We're fightin' with the Dogs of War And (a) I ain't gonna fight no more (Stop) Stop fightin' for the Dogs of War (Stop fightin' for the Dogs of War) Yeah what the hell we fightin' for? (What in the hell we fightin' for?) We're fightin' with the Dogs of War Heavy! _________________ Need a break from COH Fan Fiction? Try www.AnthonyHarte.com A Sci-Fi Fantasy Source.
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Myths n' Wraiths Freedom Phalanx Founding Member Joined: 26 Apr 2006 Posts: 832 Location: I give a crap too ;) .	Posted: Thu Jan 03, 2008 8:41 pm    Post subject:   At last... someone understands me . Dude that has so motivated me to get writing. I have been plodding through chapter 13 a half a scene at a time. It is coming forced but that is not nescesarily bad I don't think. I have a feeling once I getthrough this large and rather essential part of the story that the rest will flow quite well. _________________ Murphey's Laws of Combat "A sucking chest wound is natures way of telling you to slow down."
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Ockham Freedom Phalanx Founding Member Joined: 25 Apr 2006 Posts: 877 Location: I give a crap!	Posted: Thu Jan 03, 2008 11:51 pm    Post subject:   Every time I listen to that song, I hear Dogs of War instead of Gods of War so it just fit. Forced writing can be okay. Not the Herowas a rock novel from my end. Not the Villain has no music associated with it. It feels forced in parts, but the key is in the edits. Not the Hero flowed from the music and truly wrote itself. So read and live the following: HEINLEIN'S RULES FOR WRITING ---------------------------- 1. You must write. 2. You must finish what you write. 3. You must refrain from rewriting, except to editorial order. 4. You must put the work on the market. 5. You must keep the work on the market until it is sold. Except with Rule 5 we do it for free. _________________ Need a break from COH Fan Fiction? Try www.AnthonyHarte.com A Sci-Fi Fantasy Source.
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Myths n' Wraiths Freedom Phalanx Founding Member Joined: 26 Apr 2006 Posts: 832 Location: I give a crap too ;) .	Posted: Fri Jan 04, 2008 9:29 am    Post subject:   Rule number three will some day be violated becuase I really believe that Shadows of a Flame has a great and classic plot and feel to it, but it was the first short story I EVER wrote. I have come a long ways thanks to the help of people here and hope to go farther still. As for rule five.... well maybe someday... maybe not _________________ Murphey's Laws of Combat "A sucking chest wound is natures way of telling you to slow down."
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Ockham Freedom Phalanx Founding Member Joined: 25 Apr 2006 Posts: 877 Location: I give a crap!	Posted: Fri Jan 04, 2008 12:20 pm    Post subject:   Well if your re-writing becuase it needs editing, that's editorial order. I recently was looking over A Simple Ending and geez, I wrote that crap. IE: Quote: The half-dragon back flipped in midair and landed upright with an unnatural grace that would make a cat jealous. He watched the Dark Lord fall several feet back from the Orb and crumble to the ground. He grunted, his human blood allowing him to feel pride at out maneuvering the Saurian deity. He flexed his powerful legs and jumped, his humanoid form sailed to the Orb like an eagle soaring the great air currents above. He landed on top of the Orb when a black mist burst from the ground beneath him. He reached down to grasp the Orb, but he was drastically slowed. The air had thickened with the black mist forcing him to exert his dragon strength to only move a few inches. What is that, five 'He's in a row. GAWD! I suck. Fixing it is editorial order. You're still safe. _________________ Need a break from COH Fan Fiction? Try www.AnthonyHarte.com A Sci-Fi Fantasy Source.
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Myths n' Wraiths Freedom Phalanx Founding Member Joined: 26 Apr 2006 Posts: 832 Location: I give a crap too ;) .	Posted: Fri Jan 04, 2008 5:10 pm    Post subject:   Remebrance Found Could survive with a little 'editorial order', but Shadows of a Flame.... yeah, I really want/need to rewrite that one. Plot can stay the same, characters are solid. It just needs to get more than a paint job, it needs a renovation. _________________ Murphey's Laws of Combat "A sucking chest wound is natures way of telling you to slow down."
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Myths n' Wraiths Freedom Phalanx Founding Member Joined: 26 Apr 2006 Posts: 832 Location: I give a crap too ;) .	Posted: Sat Jan 12, 2008 11:46 pm    Post subject:   Hey this is pretty much just for your benafit Ock since you are the only active player in my SG aside from myself. Its jsut way easier to explain it here rather then trying to do it when i run into you in-game. I did a little refurbishing tonight of the Dogs of War ranking. Since I have so many different characters on the roster that are obviously not in the DoW in my stories, I redid the ranks labeling each group. There are two generic, Leashed and Unleashed, ranks for the low level fillers and otherwise unafiliated toons. Then there is Citizen Heroes, which consists basicly of BreakGlass and Tempo since Thundering Takai is an Onami member and Octive is an original DoW. Next I have the Infinites, a new SG that I may do some writing on at some point. I have the concept for most of its characters worked out but it is sort of a basket to throw all my upcoming toons into that dont fit the DoW profile; I.E. Phoenix Born and Patriot One. Last but not least is the actual Dogs of War. Anywho, Ill post up some concept stuff on the Infinites soon. So now I have multiple conceptual SGs within my SG. It all makes sense in my head. Let me know if any of your toons need to be promoted/demoted to fit into a certain grouping. _________________ Murphey's Laws of Combat "A sucking chest wound is natures way of telling you to slow down."
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