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RoboZon Man of Steel Joined: 28 Apr 2006 Posts: 276 Location: cloud 10 (forget cloud 9 it sucks)	Posted: Fri Feb 15, 2008 2:58 pm    Post subject: well...   i know.. ive been here for an alright time.. but i dont contribute like i should.. im trying.. my schedual took another leap... but in anycase.. i had some questions that i had to ask and i didnt know where else to turn.. so they come here... that just goes to show that you are all damn good writers now.. im interested in what it takes to write a book.. for publishing... what size should it be?.. how big should the chapters be? ...how should you do it?.. that sort of thing basically im wondering if you guys have any tips now some might be (prolly not) asking what its about... its... interesting... so i figured id include the preface here... yes its not coh stuff... but i really need someone who writes to give me an opinion... its not proofed yet so there's gonna be alot of errors.. but if you have time to read it let me know what you think... Quote: Lost in the torture of despair, cast into the blazing fires of hell, he is no longer man. His heart is ripped from within as he grips to life to with a loose hand. He longs for the simple darkness of death. To be astray of hurting, to no longer be. The simplest wishes permeate his mind; the loss of all or the gain of one. Crushed into a sea of loneliness and shed into the wind of misery, nothing exists but the desolation of pain. The collation of his loss and what he has left to loose burry his soul in anguish. Blood is all he knows. To rid the world of evil, of good, of everything is burning in his core. An uncontrolled lust for death overtakes his being. His sword, molded in the very fire of the love he once knew, now put forth cleanse humanity of itself. To control life, and end it in a single stroke is his purpose now. Revenge. A word he never understood until now. A feeling lost to the translation that could never be described. Into the darkness he plummets. The deepest and gloomiest pit is reserved for his hate and, in is rage, he digs. His sword clutched in one hand and a crushed rose in the other. Drenched in the repulsive combination of sweat, blood, and tears, his face contorts into the most terrible of emotions. His breaths escaping his trembling lips with gasps of pain and his nostrils flaring with pure rage, every second is torment. Deepening into pools of blackness, his eyes show the true form of everything evil. Every muscle in his body cries with new strength and the life it wishes to leave behind. Gone to the laws and toils of what is human, into the depths of hate he descends. He is a monster. now gratz to anyone who even took the time to read it _________________ "Life's battles don't always go to the stronger or faster man, but sooner or later the man who wins is the one who thinks he can." -bruce lee Eli J. Litzelman aka RoboZon
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Tropic Site Admin Joined: 25 Apr 2006 Posts: 308 Location: Florida	Posted: Fri Feb 15, 2008 3:06 pm    Post subject:   Very GLOOMY! You're right..it does need some proofing and I think your tenses move around a bit. As for the book questions, there are no restrictions on how long or short a chapter should be. As for length of a book I couldn't say. PhoenixHawk would be our resident expert in such things. There is some kind of book that lists everywhere you can send stuff for publishings, from books to magazine articles. I can't think of the name of it right now tho. Also, that new Kindle on Amazon I think lets you publish books yourself. T
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VuDu DawL Sidekick Joined: 17 Dec 2007 Posts: 64 Location: State of Confusion	Posted: Fri Feb 15, 2008 3:23 pm    Post subject: Re: well...   RoboZon wrote: i know.. ive been here for an alright time.. but i dont contribute like i should.. im trying.. my schedual took another leap... but in anycase.. i had some questions that i had to ask and i didnt know where else to turn.. so they come here... that just goes to show that you are all damn good writers now.. im interested in what it takes to write a book.. for publishing... what size should it be?.. how big should the chapters be? ...how should you do it?.. that sort of thing basically im wondering if you guys have any tips I am working on a novel. It is about a woman who inadvertently sells her soul...out of the goodness of her heart...(you'll have to read the book... hehe) and her journey through life and time to find who she really is and escape the bonds that hold her. It is an allegory to a real life struggle to control one's 'inner demons' which often end up controlling us instead. I have absolutely no clue what it needs to entail as far as getting published, actually. I am writing this for myself, more as idle therapy than anything, and may someday try to get it published, or maybe not. My theory on writing is - you can't please everyone. Write for yourself first. It will make you the most expressive. Once you have your creation formed, you can always go back and edit it to conform to publishers' norms, if that is what comes to pass. This is, of course, my personal one cent of female opinion, and should be taken as such. Quote: now some might be (prolly not) asking what its about... its... interesting... so i figured id include the preface here... yes its not coh stuff... but i really need someone who writes to give me an opinion... its not proofed yet so there's gonna be alot of errors.. but if you have time to read it let me know what you think... Read and a few edits made inline: Quote: Lost in the torture of despair, cast into the blazing fires of hell, he is no longer man. His heart is ripped from within as he grips to life to (extra "to" here should probably be deleted, and I might have made the first "to' into "his mortal" or simply "his"...but "to" is actually fine) with a loose hand. He longs for the simple darkness of death. To be astray of hurting, to no longer be. The simplest wishes permeate his mind; the loss of all or the gain of one. Crushed into a sea of loneliness and shed into the wind of misery, nothing exists but the desolation of pain. The collation of his loss and what he has left to loose("lose" perhaps?) burry (bury) his soul in anguish. Blood is all he knows. To rid the world of evil, of good, of everything is burning in his core. An uncontrolled lust for death overtakes his being. His sword, molded in the very fire of the love he once knew, now put forth cleanse humanity of itself. To control life, and end it in a single stroke is his purpose now. Revenge. A word he never understood until now. A feeling lost to the translation that could never be described. Into the darkness he plummets. The deepest and gloomiest pit is reserved for his hate and, in is rage, he digs. His sword clutched in one hand and a crushed rose in the other. Drenched in the repulsive combination of sweat, blood, and tears, his face contorts into the most terrible of emotions. His breath (no "s" needed) escaping his trembling lips with gasps of pain and his nostrils flaring with pure rage, every second is torment. Deepening into pools of blackness, his eyes show the true form of everything evil. Every muscle in his body cries with new strength and the life it wishes to leave behind. Gone to the laws and toils of what is human, into the depths of hate he descends. He is a monster. now gratz to anyone who even took the time to read it [/quote] Very nice. By all means, keep going. _________________ My City of Heroes Fan Ficiton pages: http://coh.iswiz.com The Action Zone - a City of Heroes/Villains screenshot gallery: http://coh.iswiz.com/gallery/index.php Send your favorite screenshot as an E-card!
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RoboZon Man of Steel Joined: 28 Apr 2006 Posts: 276 Location: cloud 10 (forget cloud 9 it sucks)	Posted: Fri Feb 15, 2008 4:12 pm    Post subject:   *cant stop clapping* thanks so much guys Quote: Very GLOOMY! lol very true trop.. this is actually prolly one of the gloomiest work ive ever done... but its nessisary for the plotline i need Quote: My theory on writing is - you can't please everyone. Write for yourself first. It will make you the most expressive. Once you have your creation formed, you can always go back and edit it to conform to publishers' norms, if that is what comes to pass. This is, of course, my personal one cent of female opinion, and should be taken as such. bravo my thoughts exactly, i was just curious for the sake if i ever get it published... the main reason im writing this is because this story has been nagging at the edge of my mind for ages ... i literally need to let it loose wow... thanks so much... i really really appreciate it _________________ "Life's battles don't always go to the stronger or faster man, but sooner or later the man who wins is the one who thinks he can." -bruce lee Eli J. Litzelman aka RoboZon
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VuDu DawL Sidekick Joined: 17 Dec 2007 Posts: 64 Location: State of Confusion	Posted: Fri Feb 15, 2008 6:08 pm    Post subject:   RoboZon wrote: *cant stop clapping* thanks so much guys Quote: Very GLOOMY! lol very true trop.. this is actually prolly one of the gloomiest work ive ever done... but its nessisary for the plotline i need One of my online nicknames is "Tortured Muse"... this is due to the dark (not just gloomy) nature of my writing. If you can get past the R rating, here's the samples: http://dee.iswiz.com/stories/index.php So I tend to appreciate the dark, gloomy, or macabre a bit. Quote: bravo my thoughts exactly, i was just curious for the sake if i ever get it published... the main reason im writing this is because this story has been nagging at the edge of my mind for ages ... i literally need to let it loose You can always go back and tailor it to a publisher's taste, or alternately, publish it yourself. My novella will be published in chapters via the website. (That's a 'quickie when I only have a few minutes to jot down a few paragraphs' project - apart from the book which requires long hours of complete immersion). Quote: wow... thanks so much... i really really appreciate it That's what we are here for. _________________ My City of Heroes Fan Ficiton pages: http://coh.iswiz.com The Action Zone - a City of Heroes/Villains screenshot gallery: http://coh.iswiz.com/gallery/index.php Send your favorite screenshot as an E-card!
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RoboZon Man of Steel Joined: 28 Apr 2006 Posts: 276 Location: cloud 10 (forget cloud 9 it sucks)	Posted: Fri Feb 15, 2008 9:02 pm    Post subject:   lol just cause thats one of the gloomiest doesnt mean i dont have much more.. sinister work in progress... but thanks so much... i knew i could rely on you guys.. and gals ill have to give those a read.. im perdy occupied with books and such.. but if i ever need a break from those or get bored.. ill read as much as i can _________________ "Life's battles don't always go to the stronger or faster man, but sooner or later the man who wins is the one who thinks he can." -bruce lee Eli J. Litzelman aka RoboZon
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Riotmech Class 100 Hero Joined: 27 Aug 2006 Posts: 148 Location: Home, staring at a blank screen	Posted: Mon Jun 23, 2008 11:11 pm    Post subject:   BLIMEY! Very nice work there Robo. Apart from the obvious, and few, grammar errors, your story seems captivating. Your descriptions bring alot of impact to the plot (even if this is just the beginning), though all the followed metaphors seem to clutter one after another. I would very much like to see any of yours (also V.D's) books published, then I could brag about knowing a renowned writer. Hahahaha Best of luck with it, I to have book projects in mind, though I never seem to write anything. See ya both, Riotmech, out! _________________ -[ ]- Your so sad, maybe you should buy a Happy Meal -[]-
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