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Myths n' Wraiths Freedom Phalanx Founding Member Joined: 26 Apr 2006 Posts: 848 Location: I give a crap too ;) .	Posted: Tue May 30, 2006 7:44 pm    Post subject: Chapter 14   Nice ending Voyager. The whole tale is as serious as a heart attack and the final dialogue of the chapter is, “You’re a bunch of wankers, come on.” I love it. _________________ Murphey's Laws of Combat "A sucking chest wound is natures way of telling you to slow down."
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Voyager Class 100 Hero Joined: 28 Apr 2006 Posts: 130	Posted: Tue May 30, 2006 8:57 pm    Post subject:   I should've waited a bit and reread it before sending it. But as it was, I was pulled away from it so often last week-end, that it was written over the span of 2 days, and not much sense came from it. I don't like the outcome of it, and submitting it has given a new outlook on patience.
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Vindea Policeman Joined: 25 May 2006 Posts: 44	Posted: Wed May 31, 2006 12:12 pm    Post subject: 150 Meters to the Ground   Voyager~ My house is a mess thanks to you!! Once I started reading, I just had to keep going, blatantly disregarding the 'beep-beep' of the dryer going off. I thought it was a wonderful story, though it was somewhat confusing for me to keep all the characters straight. But I'm dumb. The images that have stuck with me the most are poor Shadow-Step getting a half-castration and Cavalier getting...um....burned. Poor guys...I just had to mention it. Keep up the good work! Regards, Vindea
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Voyager Class 100 Hero Joined: 28 Apr 2006 Posts: 130	Posted: Wed May 31, 2006 2:31 pm    Post subject:   You know, I'm french, and out here, when either one of us, my wife or me, can't get around to do something, like house work, we rely on the other to do it. It's called sharing (Have a word with Myth about being perfect, dear lady) and it saves me from sleeping on the couch often enough. Thank you for the kind words, I feel special in getting a review from you. Your comment about keeping track of who's who, leads me to believe that when I type "The End." I will review and edit the story to clarify things some. And as far as making Shadow-Step a "one balled wonder" and burning Cavalier's crotch, I have no defense. These guys are my friends and they let me get away with it. Besides, what else was I gonna do, anything else would've seen them "mediport" away to full health.
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Myths n' Wraiths Freedom Phalanx Founding Member Joined: 26 Apr 2006 Posts: 848 Location: I give a crap too ;) .	Posted: Wed May 31, 2006 2:51 pm    Post subject:   Thats all I have to say about that. _________________ Murphey's Laws of Combat "A sucking chest wound is natures way of telling you to slow down."
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Ockham Freedom Phalanx Founding Member Joined: 25 Apr 2006 Posts: 892 Location: I give a crap!	Posted: Wed May 31, 2006 3:02 pm    Post subject:   I'll refrain from the French jokes. I still have relatives in France myself. (Like that has ever given me pause before. ) So is the fall over with or not? I have been waiting for you to finish so I can finish it. I think your body of work deserves my utmost attention when I read it and I dislike reading the little bits. I would most definately buy the book form if this accidently ended up at www.instantpublisher.com _________________ Need a break from COH Fan Fiction? Try www.AnthonyHarte.com A Sci-Fi Fantasy Source.
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Voyager Class 100 Hero Joined: 28 Apr 2006 Posts: 130	Posted: Wed May 31, 2006 3:17 pm    Post subject:   Ockham wrote: So is the fall over with or not? I wish it were, but time wise, still 3 to 6 months to go.... Quote: I have been waiting for you to finish so I can finish it. I think your body of work deserves my utmost attention when I read it and I dislike reading the little bits. Nothing more scary than a lion in wait Quote: I would most definately buy the book form if this accidently ended up at www.instantpublisher.com Hmm, wouldn't NCSOFT like to hit me twice with a nerf bat of biblical proportion for this....?
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Ockham Freedom Phalanx Founding Member Joined: 25 Apr 2006 Posts: 892 Location: I give a crap!	Posted: Wed May 31, 2006 3:21 pm    Post subject:   Quote: Hmm, wouldn't NCSOFT like to hit me twice with a nerf bat of biblical proportion for this....? Not if your sneaky! Maybe selling it for cost? (Hmm, chancy.) Okay I'll download your .pdf _________________ Need a break from COH Fan Fiction? Try www.AnthonyHarte.com A Sci-Fi Fantasy Source.
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