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Spectreblade Class 100 Hero

Joined: 25 Apr 2006 Posts: 120 Location: Philadelphia, PA
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Posted: Wed Dec 13, 2006 10:40 pm Post subject: Part 5 coming soon |
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Ok, I've just finished finals, and now I have a little time to get back to writing again.
This has been an important semester for me, and most of the free time I had, I was too busy playing my characters to write about them. I currently have a rough draft of Part 5, and I want to do some fact-checking about some of the Onami members, some proofreading, and get a little advice before I post it.
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Myths n' Wraiths Freedom Phalanx Founding Member

Joined: 26 Apr 2006 Posts: 832 Location: I give a crap too ;) .
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Posted: Thu Dec 14, 2006 5:22 am Post subject: |
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Gimme Gimme
Hehe, take your time dude.
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Ockham Freedom Phalanx Founding Member

Joined: 25 Apr 2006 Posts: 877 Location: I give a crap!
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Posted: Thu Dec 14, 2006 9:05 am Post subject: |
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w00t!
Onami has gone to the Americas!
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Spectreblade Class 100 Hero

Joined: 25 Apr 2006 Posts: 120 Location: Philadelphia, PA
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Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 1:43 pm Post subject: |
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Ok, so it wasn't nearly as soon as I thought it'd be, but it's finally up. What do you think. I wasn't too over the top toward the end, was I?
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Ockham Freedom Phalanx Founding Member

Joined: 25 Apr 2006 Posts: 877 Location: I give a crap!
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Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 2:58 pm Post subject: |
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AHH!!!
Man talking about making me drool and slapping me in the face. I was so looking for this battle and got smacked down.
Holy crap you better get writing buster.
What is TG up to?
So many questions and so many @sses need kicking.

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pastarican Class 100 Hero
Joined: 01 May 2006 Posts: 221 Location: Ohio
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Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 6:15 pm Post subject: |
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No fair!!!! Only I get to do cliffhangers like this!!!!!
-M-
Kidding. I got right back into the story. Now I have to wait for part 6, I guess.
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PhoenixHawk Man of Steel

Joined: 26 Apr 2006 Posts: 442 Location: as if anyone really gives a crap
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Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 10:52 pm Post subject: |
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Not over the top at all, Spectre. Good story. It's a great buildup. Can't wait to see the next!
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Myths n' Wraiths Freedom Phalanx Founding Member

Joined: 26 Apr 2006 Posts: 832 Location: I give a crap too ;) .
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Posted: Wed Jan 31, 2007 8:21 am Post subject: |
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Loved the one-liners that you snuck into this one. On top of a serious and intriguing story line you throw in a wild assortment of personalities and touches of humor. Very well done.
You know who your writing reminds me of? The way you poor such detail and personality into characters that make the quickest of cameos reminds me of Charles Dickens. I'm dead serious and I love it. That guy made up some WILD personalites and while the ones you put together are not quite as excentric as say the ones in David Copperfield they share that same passion for detail.
For isntance, when I started reading the part with the spine scrapper early on in the chapter, I thought for sure he was going to be an integral part of the story. Nope he just popped up for our amusement and disapeaered
P.S. loved the "nerf" comment.
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Ockham Freedom Phalanx Founding Member

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Posted: Wed Jan 31, 2007 10:24 am Post subject: |
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I think a lot of bad PUG stories influence you characters too. What you write also seems to be like a critique of the game at the same time, or at least the social aspect of it.
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Spectreblade Class 100 Hero

Joined: 25 Apr 2006 Posts: 120 Location: Philadelphia, PA
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Posted: Wed Jan 31, 2007 3:30 pm Post subject: |
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Being compared to Dickens. I'm flattered.
And yes, sometimes I use my writing to make fun of some of the attitudes some players have. It helps blow off steam, and put in some comic relief at the same time.
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