CoH Writer's Guild Review

[mrguy08]

Well now that the story's over I'd like to say I really like how this story drifted into other games. That said, I think this story could have gone on for a while if you had done more games. It might not have been what you were going for but we only got to visit two other games in this and I thought it would have been cool to keep that going for a while. Besides some pretty glaring grammatical and spelling errors (Its guerilla not gorilla) This turned out to be a good story and a decent venture for your first multi part entry.

[Soboscribe]

Overall I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Being new to the whole writer thing I appreciate all the tips given by everyone. It sure helps in trying to put out the best story.

Being the first multipart story I have done it was a challenge for me. Unfortunately I am only familiar with the "other" games touched on through the story. I wanted to try to stay true to the concepts of the games and was afraid to venture into unfamilar territory. However that does not mean that I am finshed with this idea of 'crossovers', the more my son & I explore the different games the more areas and ideas will open up to me. Been kicking ideas around with a minuture board game the son has recently started playing called War Machine. Researching background information on the game at present.

I have to say that sometimes we are smarter than the computer. I'm a terrible speller and rely on the spell check a little to heavily which can lead to some real goofy wording. My editing is sporatic at best. The worst person to edit is youself.
Again I am glad you enjoyed the story, and I hope I'm improving as a writer.