CoH Writer's Guild Review

[Ockham]

AAaaahhh!

You murderer!

Hmm, me thinks the elves were smater than I thought when they sent an elemental, Occam's Wall, to serve as the son of Grendel's bodyguard. To think off all the time he tried to convinvce the tanker to guard over Thauma Guard may have been premature.

I might need to start taking roll of my dragonkin just in case she shows up.

Occam's Razar... Check
Ockham's Claw (Clone of Razar)... Check
Norman Salazar... Check
North Wind (Occam's Arrow)... Check
Red Eagle (Ockham's Thunder)... Check
S...

Wait a minute... I ain't revealing anymore. You will get no death list from me!

I think my only complaint is it's too short. I am so curious on how it will all unfold.

[PhoenixHawk]

Nice quick piece. Very well set up making us immediately like the heroine who will be slain only moments later.

I too want to see where this will go.

D

[Altec]

Thirding cant wait to see where this is going I'm interested in the connection between these dragon tainted, also who is the Drake she was goner fight before coming to our time and is he still around Now if you will excuse me I have to go put some of my dragon characters into the Dragons Protection Program

[pastarican]

She don't need no stinkin' list! She will find them, and kill them....or will she?



-M-

[Vindea]

I keep finding these stories that I actually have time to sit down and read while the Bella is asleep! It's so awesome!
This story was very well written for such a short piece, and definitely left me wanting some more. Not too much more, the baby doesn't sleep THAT long!

Vindea

[pastarican]

Holy cow! I think that's the first time you've ever commented on anything I've written!

Glad you liked it!


-M-

[Myths n' Wraiths]

WAY too short Past, we better be getting the next instalment soon .

Hehe, excellent chapter. If you were going for suspense then you hit the nail on the head. It seems like everytime you start posting RL seems to get me busy elsewhere but I will definitely be doing my best to follow this.

[fixit]

The whole time I was reading this, I couldn't help but anticipate the confrontation between her and Occam's Razar. It is gonna be so... COOL!